私のはいく!
私はこのはいくがすきです。
なつがだいすきですから、このことばもすきです。
I was told in the posts that the particles should not begin or end the lines, and that the words I used do not qualify as "season words" that would make this a haiku. Please let me know why that is? I like the sentiment of this poem, so I am leaving it as is, as I don't really know how best to alter it.
Just consider me the James Joyce of haikus.
なつのそら
私はこのはいくがすきです。
なつがだいすきですから、このことばもすきです。
I was told in the posts that the particles should not begin or end the lines, and that the words I used do not qualify as "season words" that would make this a haiku. Please let me know why that is? I like the sentiment of this poem, so I am leaving it as is, as I don't really know how best to alter it.
Just consider me the James Joyce of haikus.
なつのそら
のしたにテント
でねました






